Monday, 22 August 2016
Saturday, 20 August 2016
Friday, 19 August 2016
this week we are learning how to write a descriptive writing about an image we get and how to plan it
Planning
Hear
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See
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Location
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Movement
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Temperature
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-People clicking their cameras
-People talking
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-Flash light from the cameras
-People
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-A park
-Main Road
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-Riding
-Pedaling
-Turning
-Leaning
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-Hot
-16 degrees
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Where
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What Happened
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Top Sentence
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At the public streets
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He can feel the 16 degree sun burning his body
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Top Attributes
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He’s riding on the road getting ready to blast like the wind
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trying to pedal fast he can feel his calf muscles burning like fire.
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Middle Attributes
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As he meets the sideline of the road
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He leans on his side getting ready to turn when he thinks it’s time to make his move .
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Bottom Attributes
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When he’s making his way through the finish line and on his last lap
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he can see the flashes from the people taking photo’s and feels exasperated.
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conclusion: What you feel, hear, see and think when you’re racing on the main road
People looking at you, taking photo’s and how it feels to be with the sun.
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It's his final lap. He's far from the others, he can feel the 16 degree sun burning his body. He’s riding on the road getting ready to blast like the wind, trying to paddle fast, feeling his calve muscles burning But his mind says don't give up. As he meets the sideline of the road, he leans on his side getting ready to turn as he thinks it’s time to make his move not worrying about others but himself, he pedals and pedals making his way towards the finish line... ‘RIP’ goes the ribbon as he sees the flashes from the people’s cameras taking photo’s feeling exasperated. “I won”. He says.
Hear
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See
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Location
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Movement
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Temperature
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-People cheering
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-Finish line
-The crowd
-hundreds of -people supporting him
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-Public street
-finish line
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-Waving
-Pedaling fast
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-10 degree hot
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Where
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What Happened
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Top Sentence
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Finaly he got off his bike
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He feels so mirthful he had finished the race, drinking icy water made him feel like it was 10 degree
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Top Attributes
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He can see the people at the side line
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Feeling suprised that there were hundreds of people supporting him
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Middle Attributes
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When he was on the bike
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He wanted to give up, he was tired and angry that the race was still going
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Bottom Attributes
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As soon as he past the finish line
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Wow he would plan to go home take a long cool bath and obviously taking a long nap
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Conclusion
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What it feels like to finish the race. The racer was so tired he
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He pedal as fast as he can to finish the race
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Finaly he got off his bike, he feels so mirthful he had finished the race, drinking icy water made him feel like it was 10 degree. He can see the people at the sideline, feeling suprised that there were hundreds of people supporting him. When he was on the bike, he wanted to give up, he was tired and angry that the race was still going. As soon as he past the finish line, wow he would plan to go home, take a long cool bath and obviously taking a long nap.
Tuesday, 16 August 2016
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