Friday 19 August 2016

this week we are learning how to write a descriptive writing about an image we get and how to plan it

Planning
Hear
See
Location
Movement
Temperature
-People clicking their cameras
-People talking
-Flash light from the cameras
-People
-A park
-Main Road
-Riding
-Pedaling
-Turning
-Leaning
-Hot
-16 degrees



Where
What Happened
Top Sentence
At the public streets
He can feel the 16 degree sun burning his body
Top Attributes
He’s riding on the road getting ready to blast like the wind
trying to  pedal fast he can feel his  calf muscles burning like fire.
Middle Attributes
As he meets the sideline of the road
He leans on his side getting ready to turn when he thinks it’s time  to make his move .
Bottom Attributes
When he’s making his way through the finish line and on his last lap
he can see the flashes from the people taking photo’s and feels exasperated.



conclusion: What you feel, hear, see and think when you’re racing on the main road
People looking at you, taking photo’s and how it feels to be with the sun.
It's his final lap. He's far from the others, he can feel the 16 degree sun burning his body. He’s riding on the road getting ready to blast like the wind, trying to paddle fast, feeling his calve muscles burning But his mind says don't give up. As he meets the sideline of the road, he leans on his side getting ready to turn as he thinks it’s time to make his move not worrying about others but himself, he pedals and pedals making his way towards the finish line... ‘RIP’ goes the ribbon as he sees the flashes from the people’s cameras taking photo’s feeling exasperated. “I won”. He says.


Hear
See
Location
Movement
Temperature
-People cheering
-Finish line
-The crowd
-hundreds of -people supporting him
-Public street
-finish line
-Waving
-Pedaling fast
-10 degree hot


Where
What Happened
Top Sentence
Finaly he got off his bike
He feels so mirthful he had finished the race, drinking icy water made him feel like it was 10 degree
Top Attributes
He can see the people at the side line
Feeling suprised that there were hundreds of people supporting him
Middle Attributes
When he was on the bike
He wanted to give up, he was tired and angry that the race was still going
Bottom Attributes
As soon as he past the finish line
Wow he would plan to go home take a long cool bath and obviously taking a long nap
Conclusion
What it feels like to finish the race. The racer was so tired he
He pedal as fast as he can to finish the race

Finaly he got off his bike, he feels so mirthful he had finished the race, drinking icy water made him feel like it was 10 degree. He can see the people at the sideline, feeling suprised that there were hundreds of people supporting him. When he was on the bike, he wanted to give up, he was tired and angry that the race was still going. As soon as he past the finish line, wow he would plan to go home, take a long cool bath and obviously taking a long nap.